Batista
Smackdown Superstar 
THE BEAST HAS BEEN UNLEASHED!
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Post by Batista on May 18, 2008 10:24:15 GMT -5
*I walk alone plays as Batista makes his way down the ring were his backstage atire He bends down moveing his fist back and forth in front of him as the Fire works Exploded"
TBCB:The Anounce Team
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Post by Steve Austin/Mr. Bischoff on May 18, 2008 14:26:18 GMT -5
Ok dude, well thats a start. However there is still lots you could do, firstly rather than say you are wearing your backstage atire explain what you are wearing, you did alright with the descriptivness but how do the fans react, what do you do afterward etc, you don't just want to do a half entrance and leave it TBC, go to the ring do what you are going to do or say what you are going to say and THEN leave it TBC so that the person you are RPing against has something to RP off of.
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Batista
Smackdown Superstar
THE BEAST HAS BEEN UNLEASHED!
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Post by Batista on May 18, 2008 16:09:27 GMT -5
Re try *I walk alone as batista comes out weareing this*  Batista makes his way down to the Ring gets in than grabs a Mic *In a Angry voice* Batista:EDGE GET OUT HERE! TBC |
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Post by Undertaker/Paul Heyman on May 18, 2008 16:34:42 GMT -5
Thats better except i would reckon not showing a picture but describing it would be better.
Also you dont need stars. You could have done something a little better. I would show you how to do it but i have to go in 2minutes
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Post by Steve Austin/Mr. Bischoff on May 18, 2008 17:43:22 GMT -5
Well dude you did ok but you want to explain how you are getting to the ring, what are your actions basically you are wanting to paint a picture with your words. Also being as you are going to be on Smackdown *the show that relies heavily on Promo* you would want to say way more, and don't be afraid to use the commentators as that can help fill in a lot of your RP at times
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Post by William Regal on May 19, 2008 6:57:40 GMT -5
So, yeah, basically, heres the other stuff you'll need... Describe what you're wearing (Two Piece suit? Basic Red Trunks? Etc.) (But you only need to do this if you're wearing something special (eg-Not your ring attire) Otherwise don't bother) Describe Most Movements (like, walks rather slowly toward the ring, when he gets clsoe to the ring, he builds up speed and charges at it, he then slides underneath the bottom rope by pressing his arms and knees against the canvas whilst still moving his momentum forward...ya know, something like that) Type up the lyrics of your song throughout your entrance (if you don't know what they are, just type in "I walk alone by Saliva" Lyrics in a search engine, then copy the lyrics from the site you pick) Also, describe what happens on the titantron (This doesn't have to be long, and can simply be "Batistas Titantron movie shows him Batista Bombing alot of opponents, and him spearing Regal, from lots of different angles, whilst flashing his name...It all helps) Use the announcers (Lots of good examples in the Austin Returns Promo) And finally... Use colour/Italics and Centering...it all helps makes it look nice...(Just remember, once colour for what Batista is doing, one colour for each commentator (check the RAW, ECW and Smackdown! NPC topic to see what colours you should use for each commentator) and one colour for when Batista is speaking...) Well, i hope it helps  |
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